Tuesday 14 October 2014

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It was a monday morning I just got woken up by my Mum to get ready for school. I got out of bed and reached down for my uniform but it wasn't there, I looked under my bed under my pillows but I couldn't find my uniform anywhere. 
"kaidin have you gotten in the shower yet?"
"No mum i cant find my uniform."
"Well you better find it quick or you will be going to school in your onesie."
"But mum i cant find it anywhere it’s like its just disappeared."
"Oh sure just like all your other stuff huh kaidin."
I got a note to go to school with to say that my uniform is lost and that i have to wear mufti just for today which was a pain because every teacher I walked past asked why I'm in mufti and where my uniform is, so I just showed them the note and moved on when I got home I went to go grab my iPod from where I always put it but I looked and that wasnt there either. I yelled out to my mum, "Mum have you seen my iPod," "No but do you know where did you last put it."
"Mum, if I knew where I last put it do you think I'd be asking you where it is."
"Sorry just trying to help."
I thought to myself that I'll try to find it later so I run into my room to go on my PS3 but surprise surprise it’s not there "mum oh what now kaidin i know youre up to mischief tell me where all my stuff is."
" Kaidin, do you really think I would hide your uniform away from you so you would go to school in your onesie." 
"Now what’s gone missing." 
"My PS3 the whole thing, the controller is here but not my HDMI cable, power cord or my Elgato."
I really couldnt be bothered looking for all my stuff because it will take me hours so I just thought of going for a bike ride I walk outside to get my bike and i couldnt believe it my bike  had no tyres by this time I've had enough I went up to my mum and said ,"mum i know you’ve put all my stuff somewhere please can I have it back."
"kaidin i have hidden your stuff away would you like to get it back."
"Yes where is it where is it where is it?"
"right here."
My mum led me to her bedroom where my stuff was all scatterd around the room. My PS3 the power cord, the HDMI and my Elgato my iPod was under her drawers and my bike tyres were under Liams bed and  my uniform was in my muns drawers Okay thanks mum for hiding my stuff thats okay ill do it again sometime hahaha yeah right.

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